Kia ora, I am a student at Parkview Pārua School, Welcome - Haere Mai. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note my work may include spelling or other errors because some of it will be my first drafts. I would like to get your feedback - comments, thoughts, questions and ideas to help me Learn Create Share.
Thursday, August 9, 2018
my star wars writing
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Kia Ora Dylan, i’m Hamish from marshland school. I really like your Star wars jokes, and all my friends love them too. It makes me think about my massive lego star wars collection at home. I liked the way you explained the places and timelines of all the movies, and i also didn't know the chewy was 190 years old!
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Hi Dylan. I really liked your Star Wars writing. I am a Star Wars fan too . It reminds me of the big space ships . I liked the way you used capital letters to make your writing more interesting . Perhaps you could check your punctuation as some of the character names didn't have capital letters at the start .
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